Field Notes XXVI: Creative words. An attempt at poetry in writing and film.
Hi Erik, I love your poem and your video. I am sorry not to respond sooner. I tried writing from my phone but kept losing my comments due to one reason or another. I am on my lap top now and, shock of shocks, writing is much easier. Your poem, in particular, has been a lot of fun to read - in addition to thinking about Eos and its brilliant rays - especially in light of your focus in your photography on mountain sunrises and sunsets. I liked the poem as much, though, for its mechanics. You belie your knowledge of poetry as your construct shows: rhyming end words in each stanza's first line, repeating first words in each stanza's second and third lines, and the single word fourth line - all in a reverse stair step structure. Very cool! The sixth stanza, it's fun to read, breaks the 4-line construct and provides a degree of emphasis through the long enjambment-like combination of the first line and second line, while still getting the "and," "while," and "falls" into the sixth stanza now with its 7-lines, and that's fun to spot too. All in all, a good poem to read, contemplate the meaning - hope transcends in the brilliant rays of Eos- while enjoying the mechanics employed. Bravo!
Hi Erik. I'm something of a philistine when it comes to poetry but well done for posting it. I fully identify with the terror you feel in sharing it.
And the video is absolutely fantastic. I could watch that for hours. Thanks
First things first. I need to know how the trees stayed absolutely still in your time lapse. That's very unusual and made a really cool frame for the moving clouds.
I understand poetry less than you do lol. Like, how did you even know where to indent? I'm clueless.
As far as suggestions for winter content, do you live anywhere near nature? Could you capture areas in your vicinity withouthavingto camp? Or you could even try city scapes. I'm not an inner city fan at all but I've taken some neat photos of urban life. What city are you in? I forget.