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Jonathan Giles's avatar

Hi Erik, I love your poem and your video. I am sorry not to respond sooner. I tried writing from my phone but kept losing my comments due to one reason or another. I am on my lap top now and, shock of shocks, writing is much easier. Your poem, in particular, has been a lot of fun to read - in addition to thinking about Eos and its brilliant rays - especially in light of your focus in your photography on mountain sunrises and sunsets. I liked the poem as much, though, for its mechanics. You belie your knowledge of poetry as your construct shows: rhyming end words in each stanza's first line, repeating first words in each stanza's second and third lines, and the single word fourth line - all in a reverse stair step structure. Very cool! The sixth stanza, it's fun to read, breaks the 4-line construct and provides a degree of emphasis through the long enjambment-like combination of the first line and second line, while still getting the "and," "while," and "falls" into the sixth stanza now with its 7-lines, and that's fun to spot too. All in all, a good poem to read, contemplate the meaning - hope transcends in the brilliant rays of Eos- while enjoying the mechanics employed. Bravo!

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Simon's avatar

Hi Erik. I'm something of a philistine when it comes to poetry but well done for posting it. I fully identify with the terror you feel in sharing it.

And the video is absolutely fantastic. I could watch that for hours. Thanks

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