The End of October
Field Notes XXVI: Creative words. An attempt at poetry in writing and film.
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So I guess I’m a poet now, because I have written a poem. This week has caught me in between adventures and dealing with hardships behind the scenes, so it will be short. However, this does not mean it has been easy. I’ve tried writing a few poems in the past and they always exhaust my mind like no other activity.
I’ll never claim to be a good poet. In fact, I’m terrified of sharing any of them. But, I have written in the past about the importance of not being afraid to share bad art and now is the time to hold myself accountable to that.
I present to you here 2 different poems, in vastly different formats, yet covering the same thing. Take from them what you can. Love them or hate them, I’d like to hear back either way!
The End of October
Night persists as October ends and hesitant Eos waits, shivering while the rain falls. The arboreal grip on foliage expends and vibrancy too quickly fades while a lone leaf falls. Clouds swirl like restless animals that contend and struggle against loss while overcast light falls. Her vitality muted, Eos ascends and turns wet cheeks to the sky while moments race by and time falls. But rain abates and clouds divide. Hope transcends and Eos runs to catch the day while across the fields, light triumphant, her brilliant rays fall.
The End of October
*The music is No 10 A New Beginning by Esther Abrami from the YouTube audio library.
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Hi Erik, I love your poem and your video. I am sorry not to respond sooner. I tried writing from my phone but kept losing my comments due to one reason or another. I am on my lap top now and, shock of shocks, writing is much easier. Your poem, in particular, has been a lot of fun to read - in addition to thinking about Eos and its brilliant rays - especially in light of your focus in your photography on mountain sunrises and sunsets. I liked the poem as much, though, for its mechanics. You belie your knowledge of poetry as your construct shows: rhyming end words in each stanza's first line, repeating first words in each stanza's second and third lines, and the single word fourth line - all in a reverse stair step structure. Very cool! The sixth stanza, it's fun to read, breaks the 4-line construct and provides a degree of emphasis through the long enjambment-like combination of the first line and second line, while still getting the "and," "while," and "falls" into the sixth stanza now with its 7-lines, and that's fun to spot too. All in all, a good poem to read, contemplate the meaning - hope transcends in the brilliant rays of Eos- while enjoying the mechanics employed. Bravo!
Hi Erik. I'm something of a philistine when it comes to poetry but well done for posting it. I fully identify with the terror you feel in sharing it.
And the video is absolutely fantastic. I could watch that for hours. Thanks